Apolyton opening sentence contest (revisited)

[monolith94]

Rules

Each apolyton member submits one fictional opening sentence, theoretically something that would begin a short story or novel.

The first sentences may not be plagiarised.

They shall be judged by whomever wants to judge them, on the 1/10 scale.

10/10 - Masterwork
9/10 - Memorable work of extremely publishable quality
8/10 - Above average work of publishable quality
7/10 - Publishable quality
6/10 - A work with merit, but flawed
5/10 - A work that stabs at, and has ideas of, greatness, but is pulled down by many problems
4/10 - A work with too many critical problems that need desperate revision
3/10 Writing from the middle school level, laughable
2/10 - Counterglowesque prose
1/10 - Furry fanfic

The last time we did this, it produced some really good writing. There were no winners or losers, really, but I felt that the forum benefited by having our creative muscles jostled.

I shall post my opening sentence shortly.

[David Floyd]

"That's no moon, that's a space station!"

[monolith94]

If you're going to plaigirise, Floyd, pray make it not so obvious.

[MRT144]

The bucket of chicken was on his head fashioned as a makeshift hat.

[Nubclear]

"America sank into the sea HAHAHAHAH!"

[Sava]

"Two weeks ago, I saw two guys kissing, and until this thread, that was the gayest thing I'd ever seen."

[Lonestar]

Sava, try that quote on a board without South Park fans.

"It's another Beautiful day in Lake Wobegon."

[JohnT]

Uh, I thought that the idea was for us to compose our own opening lines. Am I wrong?

(Going with the flow...)

"It was a dark and stormy night. Suddenly a shot rang out!"

[JohnT]

2/10 - Counterglowesque prose
1/10 - Furry fanfic

Shouldn't those be reversed?

[Sava]

Originally posted by Lonestar
Sava, try that quote on a board without South Park fans.

"It's another Beautiful day in Lake Wobegon."

haw haw that shows how much you know... they weren't talking about threads...

I'm surprised, I figured that would take a while for someone to catch. nice job...

[Ben Kenobi]

"Eh bein, mon prince, so Genoa and Lucca are no more than the family estates of the Bonapartes."

[self biased]

i once knew a man who thought he was ten feet tall.

[Bugs ****ing Bunny]

It was at the moment where the first .306 round whistled past her left ear that Shelley finally conceded that burning her Dutch Cap had been a really bad idea.

[Bugs ****ing Bunny]

Re: Apolyton opening sentence contest (revisited)

Originally posted by monolith94

2/10 - Counterglowesque prose

I'll be interested to see if you can find another non-literature forum that has a higher proportion of published writers than CG does.

[Urban Ranger]

Re: Re: Apolyton opening sentence contest (revisited)

Originally posted by Lazarus and the Gimp
I'll be interested to see if you can find another non-literature forum that has a higher proportion of published writers than CG does.

Published in print or published on the Web? Published as literature or published as horoscope guide?