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  • #16
    Now on with the story.
    PART 3 B Continued
    The defenders quickly arranged themselves into three ranks atop the rubble of the gaping one hundred foot breach in the southern wall. Many more were on rooftops, in buildings or any place they could find that afforded the opportunity to send their foe to hell. Systematically the front rank let rip its volley and dashed back behind their comrades in the rear to reload, whilst the next rank took aim and fired. It was textbook precision, typical of the well disciplined British forces.

    The Russian commanders may have had the advantage of numbers, but they lacked strategic acumen. They fell like corn to a scythe, charging headlong into a hail of musket balls and small cannon fire.

    The eastern gates opened to release the eager English Calvary, there task to rout the Russian gun emplacements, and counter attack the main assault force from the flank. The initial charge of the Cossacks stalled, but the Russian cannons burst back into life decimating the ranks of defending Musketmen, seemingly though oblivious to the fact that they were also bombarding their own men.

    As the English Calvary came within sight of the enemy they tried to turn the guns on them, but to no avail. They were on them in no time and as the cannon fire had now ceased, the defenders inside the city regrouped.
    The Cossacks too had rallied and still around six and a half thousand strong renewed their attack against the now lessened resistance.

    Meanwhile although acheiving there main objective, having destroyed the Russian cannons, the calvary came under severe fire from entrenched Russian Musketmen. Taking large casualties they were routed from the field, and could not possibly attack from the flank without running through a barrage of enemy fire.
    Unlike their Russian counterparts the English officers valued the lives of their men, and sounded the retreat.

    Back at the southside the Russian forces now even smaller and mostly on foot were engaging the British in close combat with guns and swords. As the surviving calvary reentered the city they were told to dismount and go to strenghen the line. The Russians although a tough race lacked the discipline to fight effectively and were being massacared. At twelve noon after five hours of fighting the Russians sounded the retreat, finally realising that today Leeds would not fall.

    A cheer went up from the British all along the line, Over six thousand Russians and around two thousand English men had lost their lives with many more wounded.

    Sadly within a week the garrison fell and the Russians captured Leeds, Two days before the fleet would have arrived.
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    • #17
      Whoa... that last sentence was a killer.

      You fast forwarded a week and all that valiant effort was for nothing?!? Jeez... poor Brits.

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      • #18
        Yes it does seem a shame for them. I hadnt planned to write any detail of this war originally, aiming to get Mike quickly to adulthood and OOPS!! nearly gave the plot away

        Its amazed me how once you start writing it seems to explode in your mind. What starts out as a sentence in your plot becomes a paragraph on paper.
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        • #19
          They deserved it.
          Here is an interesting scenario to check out. The Vietnam war is cool.

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          • #20
            They deserved it

            You really have got a dark side have'nt you unscratchedfoot!!
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            • #21
              No, its just my way of getting into your story. When I watch movies or read stories I always hope the good guys win and the bad guys get their just desserts (or the other way around when the 'heros' are Mel Gibson and Danny Glover). Kinduv simple I guess.
              Here is an interesting scenario to check out. The Vietnam war is cool.

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              • #22
                Figures. Away for a few days and everyone starts writing like mad.

                I was hoping to find out more about the characters than the war, but that's just me and I trust you'll get back to that. Good show so far and I hope you will write what entertains you first.

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                • #23
                  Originally posted by ChrisiusMaximus
                  Its amazed me how once you start writing it seems to explode in your mind. What starts out as a sentence in your plot becomes a paragraph on paper.
                  Fun, isn't it?

                  Great story! Terrific battle scenes.

                  You're a good story teller and your improvements in punctuation and spelling let the story flow.

                  Looking forward to Mike's contribution (it's his story, after all).

                  Keep up the good work.

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                  • #24
                    Once again many thanks for all the feedback, it really does help. I am dedicating part 3 to unscratchedfoot cause he makes me laugh so much!
                    BTW I wish you would continue your story.
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                    • #25
                      Originally posted by ChrisiusMaximus
                      BTW I wish you would continue your story.
                      Speaking of which, Chrisius, we are looking forward to part four, you know.

                      :hint, hint:
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                      • #26
                        PART 4 A New Constitution

                        The war had caused much upheavel back in England, and the risk of the goverment collapsing was a very real danger. Jack Richards set off on his way to work as usual but not to the site of the Sistine Chapel, in the latest of what could only be described as drastic changes of policy, all work had ceased and been transfered to another project.

                        In a press release to be in that days news the Queen explained the reasons for shifting policy, and building a new modern Naval Technology Foundation in the grounds of the Royal Admiralty. It was to be known as
                        Magglellans Voyage and would become a centre of excellence for ship design and innovation. This was yet another issue that would not go down well with the public.

                        The war was over! Russia had not destroyed Leeds, probably due to its vast mining infrastructure. Although it was not known what had become of its citizens. The Queen had sued for peace to allow trade to recommence, the worlds merchant fleets had been to frightened to put to sea during the recent hostilities, and some luxury goods were beginning to run out.

                        The government had decided that with the loss of Leeds it was impossible to prosper in any way from the continuation of the war. New England was simply to far away, even with the worlds most advanced ships it took a three week voyage to get there. The second fleet was called back to England.

                        Mike was starting at his new school today, Bettys cousin Sir Timothy Hughes was the Headmaster of one of Londons better schools, and she had managed to talk him into giving Mike a scholarship. The fact that Mike was fluent in Russian was the winning factor however. Mike did not realise it yet but this was going to change his life, this was the beginning of his destiny.

                        "Mum Ive written a letter for Jess, do you think Ill be able to post it?" he asked his Mum.

                        "Leave it with me" she shouted from upstairs "Ill post it for you when I go shopping, now run along to school or youll be late" she said.

                        "Okay bye Mum" Mike shouted back as he closed the door. As he walked along the pavement his mind drifted back to happier times with his friends in Leeds. This only made sad and angry, he couldnt bear to think what may of happened to Jess and all his friends. He knew that Jess may not still be alive but he blanked that thought out, I hate the Russians! I want to kill them all, he thought to himself, Im going to join the Army and kill them all!. He remembered the Musketmen hed seen at the docks the night they had arrived in London, thats what Im going to be he thought to himself.

                        That evening Jack arrived home from work, Mike and Betty were waiting at the table in the kitchen for him. Betty always liked to have the three of them eat together, its what makes a family special she always said.

                        "Hello Son had a good day at school?" he asked and he gave Betty a peck on the cheek "hello love, whats for tea? ooh lobby me favourite."

                        "Wash your hands and sit yourself down, Ill serve it up now" Betty said.

                        "Mum did you remember to post my letter? whats that you got dad?" asked Mike.

                        "Yes son I did, now eat up your stew" she said.

                        "Its an official government notice lad, theres going to be an election. Dont really understand it myself yet but it seems that the government wants to become a democracy, and it wants to write something called a new constitution." Jack told Mike "Hey Betty it says that the Queen will have no say in goverment policy if this happens. Due to the current political unrest in the country at the moment , it says that the Queen has agreed to let the people decide how they want to be governed."

                        "Never mind all that now" said Betty "eat up your stew before it gets cold will you."

                        Later that evening Mike asked his father what a democracy was, he knew England was a monarchy and that Elizabeth the Queen was the monarch. Hed also heard of the Roman Republic although he had no idea what that meant.

                        "Well Son it says here that a democracy is a new form of government, a new concept in government to be correct. With whats happened with the war and all the Queen has had to agree to hold elections to avoid a civil war."

                        "But whats an election Pa?"

                        "Well it says here that every man over the age of 25 years old in the empire will get to vote for the government they want to run the empire. If most of them vote for the Queen then we will stay as a monarchy, if not we will become a democracy, the first in the world!!" Jack replied.

                        "Who will you vote for Pa?" asked Mike.

                        "To be honest Im not really sure lad, now come on lets be having you off to bed now" said Jack,

                        "Okay Pa, night mum night dad" said young Mike.

                        "Say Betty what letter was our Mike on about earlier?" Jack asked.

                        "Oh hes wrote to Jess, I took it down to the post office today" she replied.

                        "Lets hope shes okay! for Mikes sake. Did you ask if their was any news of refugees love?"

                        "Yes darling, Im sorry they couldnt tell me anything, try not to worry to much Im sure Jim, Sally and the kids will be alright."said Betty rubbing Jacks tired shoulders.

                        "I hope your right Betty" said Jack as a tear rolled down his cheek.

                        PART 5 A Change Of National Policies.
                        The impact of the results of the worlds first democratic elections and Mikes new educational direction. A time of much diplomatic intrigue.
                        Ill post this whwn Ive finished writing it, in the meantime what do you think of it so far. Please feel free to make suggestions also if there good Ill use them.
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                        • #27
                          There you go vovansim, just what the doctor ordered now take two teaspoons after each meal and complete the course.

                          Hope part four is to your liking.
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                          • #28
                            Nice development and I like the foreshadowing with Mike seeing the Musketmen at the docks - betcha he becomes a soldier.

                            Keep it up, going well so far.

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                            • #29
                              How much are you willing to gamble my good friend?
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                              • #30
                                TheGuitarist: betcha he becomes a soldier.

                                I wouldn't bet on that... What good will the knowledge of Russian do a musketman?

                                I'm thinking Mike is going to become a spy or a diplomat and undermine the Russian government from inside.

                                ChrisiusMaximus: Hope part four is to your liking.

                                Yes, it is, indeed.
                                Last edited by vovan; October 24, 2002, 21:06.
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