A undefeated Diety players story

[fasteddie]

obi:
move a unit you don't need to the city that needs production.. then disband it. you get production directly towards what that city is building


my question: if you disband outside a city does the production go to the civ. or get lost?


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i've seen the man use the needle, (seen the needle use the man) --megadeth

[Sniper]

You only get the production if you disband in the city. You get 50% of the production needed to build the unit in the first place.

[Atahualpa]

When you are finished, you can send your story to MarkG. It will be available in the callungs section then.

ATa

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if something is easy, something is wrong

when I do bad things it is called mad, but when god does bad things it is called nature
-- the devil

if you kill one you are a murderer, if you kill millions you are a conqueror!

[KDan]

It's called the Callings section. It's a pretty good story, although you should perhaps put more feeling in it, and hide the game-workings aspect of it (like stacks of nine - call them divisions, or armies) but mostly it's good.
ONE FAVOUR though...
PLEASE run the Replace tool in your editor and replace all the occurences of 'were' with 'was'. I know it's just a detail, but it's bothering me! :-)

Good luck with your game, I can't wait to see how it goes...

Daniel

[*Ed*]

Re: grammar, the replacement of all incidences of 'were' with 'was' is incorrect. So don't do it! The few errors can be smoothed out when the story is proofread for the Callings section. The story is great!

I think that the 'game-workings' are good, it is what other players can relate to - they dream about 'stacks of nine', not divisions...

However these are just my opinions...

[This message has been edited by *Ed* (edited August 04, 1999).]

[fasteddie]

i'm with ed, most of the stories sent in are just that, stories. Nothing about the inner workings. I like the story just the way it is! (unless your not going to finish then your a crackhead).

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i've seen the man use the needle, (seen the needle use the man) --megadeth

[KDan]

>The Capitol Madrid were founded on grassland
was...

>If I where to be able be wage war on two fronts
was

>Realizing that The wonder had to be built in The capitol, as it where by far The larger of The two citys
was...

>The Capitol began The construction of The sphinx The second The stone working technology were discovered.
was

>as I where forced to lower the readiness of my armies to stand a chance in the wonder race.
was

>The map where narrowing down to just one Tile in several locations and just not in the locations mentioned earlier.
was

>The philosopher stone were built without any problems
was

>except The Greek and The Germans as I were at war with these two nations.
was

>The war with The Germans and Greeks were still restricted to sporadic fighting
was

>In 1000AD My nation were ranked 3rd
...

>and discovered that my nation now were ranked 1st just passing The Zulu’s on The power-graph.
was

Those are all the mistakes I could find at first glance. Indeed, there were quite a few which were right... :-)
Still, there were quite a few mistakes, which can get annoying in time...

:-)

Well, when I was playing wing commander, I dreamt about repetitive missions through asteroids, shooting hundreds of Kilrathi, etc... but I actually tried writing a story about it and it just is NOT interesting.
If you write this story and hide the game workings, you can get everyone to relate. If you show them, only hardcore ctp fans will relate...
Your choice!

Daniel

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[Gregurabi]

> >If I where to be able be wage war on two fronts
> was

"were".

This is an example of the subjunctive mood. "If I were a rich man..." not "If I was a rich man...."

[KDan]

Ok, you're right on that one... I was a bit tired this morning :-)

Daniel

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[Scooter]

Look, who the hell cares if his grammer is incorrect, it's a great story! Get over it.

Diemar: Please continue.

Grammer checkers: Get a life and an enema, there's something stuck up there.


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"BEEFCAKE, BEEFCAKE!!!

-E. Cartman

[fasteddie]

hehe cheers scooter!!

comon diemar im dying over here!!

[Obi Wan Kenobi]

Come on Diemar, finish the story!!!!!!

[KDan]

Yeah, please, I also want to hear the rest of the story!

Daniel

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[Sniper]

What happened to Diemar??? Did he decide not to finish the story?
[This message has been edited by Sniper (edited August 18, 1999).]

[Chuckles]

I guess he didn't survive.