Better; you almost have a flow in a few spots there in the first half, but lose the plot somewhat in the second half. The beat is better than in the previous tracks of yours that I've heard, however, so that may be skewing my judgment. Still, I think you're making progress and should continue to work on your rhythm and delivery.
edit: Listened to it again. 0:42 to 0:53 is the best section. See if you can build on the flow you demonstrated there.
edit: Listened to it again. 0:42 to 0:53 is the best section. See if you can build on the flow you demonstrated there.
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