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**Inverse Icarus** · July 31, 2003, 22:06

yeah home chicken! you need to crizzicizzizzize our songs!

**Pekka** · July 31, 2003, 22:09

Yeah AS, get your ass here and judge us!

But I'm serious about the lyrics thing, it would mean a lot to me if you had the time to make real lyrics as they are in the scene. I guarantee the story is real and it would make a great song, and I think it deserves a song for that matter. But that is only if you have the time and the will, and if you don't, I understand completely.

**Al B. Sure!** · July 31, 2003, 22:34

you rhymed surprisingly good pekka especially considering english is a second language for you. and a heartfelt topic is always good even if the lyrics are crap but nah you came off better than i thought.

but i got a rule for myself to not make songs about **** i didn't experience and all that (so i won't fall into the usual talking about gang-banging all the time nonsense that aint me) and i did not experience your friend. but why don't you make something? You got basically a rough draft right there. re-organize your thoughts a bit (maybe make your lines all uniform and about 12 syllables for easier flow) and lengthen it a bit and divide it into verses (rap verses are fairly long... you almost never hear rappers spit verses shorter than 16 lines) and then you got the technical **** done and you can concentrate on the topic more and be poetic.

thanks

**reds4ever** · July 31, 2003, 22:36

I thought I did rather well, old boy!

**Pekka** · July 31, 2003, 22:40

AS, thanks for comments. I understand you, and I think that makes lots of sense. I don't know what syllables means. I don't know how to make it better, I'm not experineced with this stuff. I think I'd make it better if I'd write down what I want to say, and then start working from there and not just start typing and taking brakes to think what would rhyme with something..

but now that I read I notice that the 'flow' could be better with more words. Some of the stuff ends too quickly.

**Al B. Sure!** · July 31, 2003, 22:41

no you didn't, young girl

**reds4ever** · July 31, 2003, 22:42

Originally posted by Albert Speer
no you didn't, young girl

who was it then?

**Al B. Sure!** · July 31, 2003, 22:44

Pekka:

syllables are the sounds you use in words... say these words...

"House" "cat" "dog" those words got one syllable
"brother" "mother" "city" two syllables
"forgotten" "helsinki" three syllables

and why not use Ugric?

**Pekka** · July 31, 2003, 22:48

ok I understand what syllables are now.
Ugric? You mean I'd do it in my own language?

**Al B. Sure!** · July 31, 2003, 22:52

i assume you can write in your own language better than you can write in english...

**Pekka** · July 31, 2003, 22:57

Well naturally. It is especially difficult for me to get the flow right in english. Also vocabulary is limited, and I'll have to go with what rhymes.. with limited vocabulary.
And naturally is more difficult to express myself in foreign langauge so sure... but none of you could understand it if I wrote it in my language!

edit: sleepy time ZzzZZzz

**Tuberski** · July 31, 2003, 23:04

Originally posted by Pekka
ok I understand what syllables are now.
Ugric? You mean I'd do it in my own language?

The way I learned syllables in 2nd grade:

take a word, Tuberski for instance, sound it out and every tim you come to a break clap your hands.

Tu(clap) ber(clap) ski(clap)

Three syllables.

At times, I still do it to this day, but only with imaginary claps.

As really clapping would make me look stupid.

ACK!

**Al B. Sure!** · July 31, 2003, 23:13

i was told to count it on your fingers and i still count syllables on my fingers

**Tuberski** · July 31, 2003, 23:18

I don't know why we clapped, I think so that it was the whole class participating.

ACK!

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