The Winds of Change

[ChrisiusMaximus]

Hey Unscratchedfoot I dont think it was necessary to completely remove the last two chapters if we give honest feedback its because we like what weve read,couldnt you edit it down and repost a new chapter.My main point in my last post was that your characters should get to cultural building sooner rather than later and move the plot along.
Please dont give up on this its very original and started brilliantly.

[unscratchedfoot]

Nope, those 2 installments weren't part of the original story plan. The first part is actually half the story with the second part being the dramatic climax in the cultural building. I don't why, but I had been playing online chess for like 4 hours into the night and then for some loony reason decided to continue the story on 2 occasions even though I was 90% asleep. I'll cook up the ending soon enough. Talking about cooking, I'm hungry again so it won't be today.

[steamthunk]

I didn't have a problem with any of the segments myself. I think people were just impatient to find out what the heck was going on! I have to agree and say that it was unnecessary to actually remove them.

[unscratchedfoot]

On this forum it's better if stories are kept as short as possible. Like my garden story for example, I left out tons of situational description, as well as scenary, I would really have liked to have had in the story, to just have the bare essentials and keep the story going.

I'm considering finding a good non-civ story forum to continue this hobby and maybe try something a little different, especially since I no longer play the Civ3. I had more than my fill after 4 or 5 games of it. I got some ideas for some non-civ stories instead. For now though, the online chess thing is a little too engaging.

Does anyone know of a good short story website, preferrably non-professional?

[steamthunk]

I'm considering finding a good non-civ story forum to continue this hobby and maybe try something a little different, especially since I no longer play the Civ3. I had more than my fill after 4 or 5 games of it.

Blasphemy! There's no such thing as enough of Civ!

I still think you should just write what you want. If you don't enjoy writing it then chances are people won't enjoy reading it. You'll never be able to please everyone no matter who your audience or what your topic. I think everyone would like this to continue, but I can understand if you're tired of writing about civ.

[ChrisiusMaximus]

Ditto but fair enough if you dont want to continue,for ages now people have been complaining that there isnt enough feedback here, but I think thats changed now as their are some great stories coming through and several people regulary posting their comments good or bad but.I feel the reviewing done here is both honest and constructive so come on you budding authors get writing.

[unscratchedfoot]

I'm going to finish this story but I'm wondering if opening a new thread and moving the first episode over would be better considering all the "filler" in this one. First time readers might get lost in the clutter.I could give the new thread a different name or something.

[unscratchedfoot]

I'm just gonna open a new thread for this and fix it up properly. Moderators feel free to delete this thread as the story's been removed.

[vovan]

This was my favourite unfinished story of yours... Looking forward to you adding to it.

[Centauri18]

What the heck happened Scratch? You deleted the whole thing.

[Verto]

I believe the person who created the thread has the option to delete it.