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**EQandCivfanatic** · June 1, 2003, 23:53

sounds a bit like my political views. America should be for the people and not for whichever party happened to have been provided with the best campaign thanks to thhe damn corporations or "private interest groups"

I personnally believe that the UA the way it is really cant go much further.

If we are to grow and continue to prosper there are only two ways the US of A can go.

We could become a more enlightened democracy where the people vote on al lthe issues via internet and with a significantgly decreased Congress and Senate. Or we could go to the other most effiencient government, a dictatorship. The USA is so corrupt right now thanks to corporations and easy to control media, the people no longer truely have a say in the government, a dictatorship is the only thing that could fix the problems.

Hopefully an enlightened person like in your story shows up skilord, or the US of A is in trouble.

**SKILORD** · June 2, 2003, 00:38

And I quote: 'Is there a war or anything coming up'

My response: No, thank you for the feedback.

As for EQ:

As I said, Shaw's veiws are not my own, he's more of a mellow Libertarian.

**SKILORD** · June 3, 2003, 09:44

I have to finish Legacy still, but here are the Short Story plans.

An Action Peice; My description of action is presently lacking, so I need to do such an exercise to see i f I can clear that up. It'll be really rather short, but as suspenseful as I can make it.

Then I'm planning a longer peice called Cleansing Fire about a secret war against a domestic terrorist cell.

It will be written as 1 peice, as is this and Peacemakers, but will incorporate whatever techniques for action that I develop as well as the other things I've learned from Freedom and Peacemakers

Legacy never realkly taught me anything, other than displaying my trouble spots, but it's fun, so I'll finish it.

Maybe when I feel worthy to once again tread upon the world of Peacemakers I'll write the stories there.

**unscratchedfoot** · June 3, 2003, 10:22

Originally posted by SKILORD
My response: No thank you for the feedback.

You don't like my feedback?

Looking forward to your next stories.

**SKILORD** · June 3, 2003, 12:29

I am not here to critique the feedback.

**Sheep** · June 6, 2003, 06:36

Originally posted by SKILORD
Thank you most of all ST. I love constructive feedback.

I know that the wife's bit was too short, and I'm working on adding an earlier introduction to the Main Character, Ed, with more about his wife.

As for Settings, I'll earnestly work on it.

I got the munchies reading this. Does that qualify as constructive.

**SKILORD** · June 6, 2003, 10:04

I already thaked you for your candor Sheep.

**SKILORD** · June 6, 2003, 10:06

You don't like my feedback?

My mistake, it should be: No; Thank you. rather than: Nothank you.

**SKILORD** · September 19, 2003, 12:44

Now that you've forgotten about it I think It's time for me to post the second edition. I havew a few stories that I'm writing undercover, but I won't talk about them because my projects ususally fail when they become public.

This is my second draft, Second drafts are usually the final copy for me, and so I hope this will be. I have fleshed out the character of Edward Walsh, I have added more about his wife. I have added new dialogue where I felt that the old dialogue was weak, new descriptions where I thought the old were insufficient. It is not perfect, but it is enough. I do not ask perfection from it, only that it be a sufficient bearer of its call. I feel that it’s done, on my part at least. Now it is up to you to read it, and interpret it.

Enjoy!

**vovan** · September 21, 2003, 12:54

Heya, SKI,

I wonder how I missed this one...

Any way, I think that's some pretty sweet stuff.

I agree with somebody above there who said that the characters are pretty cool. And I, too, am looking for more stuff from ya.

EDIT: Ah yes, now I see: the last week of May was my first week at work, so that's why I didn't check out these forums for a while.

**SKILORD** · September 22, 2003, 16:05

Thasnks vova.

**vovan** · September 29, 2003, 20:48

Okay, folks, read this and comment.

This thing here deserves the highest of praise, yet I see none. I want at least three responses by new people by the time I come back tomorrow.

Seriously, though. This be sweet stuff. Highly recommend to SKILORD fans and otherwise.

**ChrisiusMaximus** · September 30, 2003, 12:28

It was good in the first place but yes you have improved it so

to you.

**Solomwi** · October 10, 2003, 03:57

I missed the first draft of this, but thoroughly enjoyed the second. It moves quickly enough, especially for what is normally a somewhat dull topic, and the way you've handled the topic is good. The election came up rather abruptly, but I don't think that really has any bearing on the story. Sadly, I'm left with the conclusion that Walsh sank himself, and gave Shaw a boost, with the debate... but I still don't see it as being enough of a boost, leading inevitably to a win for the nameless Democrat, keeping out the best man, and the one with a glimmer of hope. Ah, well, maybe it's just me.

Still, great job!

**joe08536** · October 10, 2003, 22:06

Trust me

You're not being cynical enough.

But, I forget myself and my forum, my apologies. I'm sure you're just warming up.

BTW, a very good thread

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