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    So what does anyone think of my latest attempt at SMACX storytelling?

    D4
    "I know nobody likes me...why do we have to have Valentines Day to emphasize it?"- Charlie Brown

  • #2
    Not bad at all. I liked the way Morgan tried to wriggle out about the military loss.



    Oh, and don't forget to check "The Homeworld", by Kassiopeia!

    I see you are German. Hence your mother language isn't English. Same here. Because of that, I think that my English stories lack more verbally then my Finnish written stories. You don't seem to crash on the language barrier at all. Cripes.
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    • #3
      Both of you guys come across very well.
      Which side are we on? We're on the side of the demons, Chief. We are evil men in the gardens of paradise, sent by the forces of death to spread devastation and destruction wherever we go. I'm surprised you didn't know that. --Saul Tigh

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      • #4
        Actually, I'm not german....I just live in germany. I'm a US soldier stationed in Germany. (At least for a few more months)

        D4
        "I know nobody likes me...why do we have to have Valentines Day to emphasize it?"- Charlie Brown

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        • #5
          Originally posted by D4everman
          Actually, I'm not german....I just live in germany. I'm a US soldier stationed in Germany. (At least for a few more months)

          D4
          Your stories are still good.
          Which side are we on? We're on the side of the demons, Chief. We are evil men in the gardens of paradise, sent by the forces of death to spread devastation and destruction wherever we go. I'm surprised you didn't know that. --Saul Tigh

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          • #6
            From Dawn to Dusk on Planet

            Solid work! You've not only told a good story so far, within the confines of the game world, but also managed to add a healthy dose of humour. I particularily liked the segment with the black marketeer in Believer land. "Love Slave of Planet" indeed! I think this is one of the funniest pieces since that Hillbilly faction story a while back, with the added benefit of being a full-scale "serious" story as well. Keep up the good work.

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            • #7
              Thanks! I'm glad you found humour in it. I got the idea from my experiences in Desert Storm actually. We were told that things like playboy mags were illegal in saudi but i knew a lot of guys (not me...I swear) that sold nudie mags to local nationals for ridiculous prices. (One guy I know sold a penthouse to a saudi man for 90 bucks!)

              D4
              "I know nobody likes me...why do we have to have Valentines Day to emphasize it?"- Charlie Brown

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              • #8
                I think everyone under 18 would buy a nude mag for 90 bucks
                I liked the "Artisan Beck" part the most. It was not funny, but it really told how a whole planet can stop when a soul of great talent is lost.
                And it seems that I'm the only one that writes fiction without using his mother language. But that's no excuse, no reason not to kill my story.
                Cake and grief counseling will be available at the conclusion of the test. Thank you for helping us help you help us all!

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                • #9
                  li liked your story Kass...I'm eagerly awaiting more.
                  "I know nobody likes me...why do we have to have Valentines Day to emphasize it?"- Charlie Brown

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