Judge this writing

[aneeshm]

Prarambha - The Beginning

I came across this while browsing Ashok Banker's site. This is by an aspiring author.

I'll explain my own interest in it later.

[LordShiva]

He needs to aspire harder

[aneeshm]

Originally posted by LordShiva
He needs to aspire harder

You read it already?

[LordShiva]

I read the first paragraph.

[aneeshm]

It can get incredibly irritating if you don't like the style, or don't learn to tolerate it.

[LordShiva]

Yeah, the 'He did this. He did that. He did something else" thing was quite annoying.

[Provost Harrison]

Summary?

[aneeshm]

Originally posted by Provost Harrison
Summary?

Isn't that rather defeating the point?

[Provost Harrison]

I want fast soundbites for the fast generation dammit!

[Kontiki]

Summary: Something pro-Hindu, pro-Brahmin, anti-Muslim or some combination thereof.

[C0ckney]

if anyone can be arsed to read this, please post a summary, kthxbye.

[DaShi]

Agreed, I couldn't get past the second paragraph and that was only because I forced it.

[Bkeela]

The writing could be better, but I became interested to know what the man on the hill was looking out for. But alas, I don't have time to read the whole thing.

[Ninot]

Very irritating to read.

[Elok]

He needs to vary his sentence structure; I too could not get past the first paragraph or so. Guk. Also, the image of this guy getting distracted and walking face-first into a cliff would be pretty funny if it were written better. But I imagine it's not a comedy.