Review a paper of mine ( topic is chemistry, btw )

[Az]

Here's this paper I've written. It's in english, so it should be ok with you. All remarks, both scientific, and on the crucial issue of punctuation marks are welcome.

Oh, and be gentle.

[Combat Ingrid]

Can't open the attachment. Go catalyze yourself

[Az]

wtf? wierd. How about now?

[Combat Ingrid]

Nope

[Az]

you do have acrobat reader, yes?

[Combat Ingrid]

Last time I checked

[Az]

does it give you an error message? I open it without any problems with a reader.

[Combat Ingrid]

No, I just get this small icon you get from broken links.

[Combat Ingrid]

It works now, I just had to save the file first. For some reason it doesn't open in the browser window.

[Atahualpa]

The title is too long and you should use 2 columns (if in accordance with whatever journal or conference you are going to send to, or is it just for internal purposes?). Also, what horrible style file is that? Did you write it in latex?
Where is the abstract?
Where is the information about your institute and the university or organization you are affiliated with?

So much for the layout, I understand nuts about chemistry.

[Az]

It's not a publishing format, silly. It's a paper I am writing for a course.

And the title isn't too long. You should've seen some of the titles Grad papers have here, for example.

[Pekka]

yeah it's science so you can't exactly control the ti tles always like you want to... you can't just 'ohh the darn thing looks .. not cute! Let me see.. let's just put "them things" or just "stuff".. yeah that'll work.. fits the powerpoint better as well.. oh yeah now we're cooking.. '. INSULT!

[Atahualpa]

I know about the length of titles in chemistry, that's why I put the smiley.

Still I think it would look way more professional if it would have a better format. People are used to read lots of papers and it will make it easier for them to read it when it's in a format they know.
I have learned some basic latex over the past months and it's incredibly useful!

Interesting journal title of the first reference btw. I had always been suspicious about these chem guys.

[Az]

Yeah, it's a long-standing tradition around chem. department undergrads to call Anal. Chemistry "Anal Chemistry". First reason being that the field is incredibly anal retentive just about anything ( though it has gotten a lot better in the last decades ) . Of course, sometimes, being anal retentive is a good thing.

[Combat Ingrid]

Some friendly comments after glancing through your paper:

* There are many minor errors, such as "ofof" in part IX

* Write "it is", would not" etc, never "it's", "wouldn't" etc

* Your sentences are too long and sometimes redundant. Examples:

The general logic of the Abzyme approach is that if antibodies have a biological function to capture and attach themselves to certain molecular structures, that attachment is favoured thermodynamically, and thus, if vaccination occurs with a molecule that has similar steric and electronic properties to the transition state of the rate-determining state of a reaction, the result will be an enzyme that will be able to lower the energy of the transition state of said reaction, and thus will be an effective catalyst.

That is a rather long sentence

The more we get into the reaction, the more clearly we can see the problems that present themselves in this reaction:

Redundant text. Write something like "The further we get into the reaction, its problems become more apparent" instead.

* Make sure you use the same terminology throughout the paper. I noticed that you used both "rate determining step" and "rate defining step", there may be others. It's no big deal, but it may confuse senile professors.

I can't really comment on the organic chemistry part, it's not my area of expertise