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Ok, this is my first story. I know it isn’t very good, but I would really appreciate if people would critique it so I can have something to go on for some other stories. Enjoy!
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WASHINGTON, AMERICA
Lincoln looked down at the piece of paper presented before him. How could he of let this happen?
He knew when he signed it, it would get him nothing except maybe a bit of time. He knew Bismak would stop at nothing. But what choice did he have? He looked over at Bismak, smiled a fake smile, and put his pen to the paper ending all hopes of an American resistance.
LONDON, ENGLAND
“Greetings friends.” Elizabeth smiled, “as you may or may not know, the Americans have surrendered to the Germans. They were our most powerful ally, now we must fight their men. No more nations can be allowed to fall at the hands of that warmonger Bismak”
“But he can’t be stopped, his offence is too quick and strong, their defence rock solid. We should surrender now to prevent casualties” proclaimed Cleopatra.
The debating went on for hours with no solution fixed. The world was in no better shape then it was when the meeting started.
WASHINGTON, AMERICA , TWO WEEKS LATER
“So this is it, isn’t it Jack?”
“Yeah Curt, this is it. This is the start of us winning our freedom back. This is where it all begins.” answered Jack
They knew they had no chance of rebelling against the German army. Although the Americans had officially surrendered only two weeks ago, Germany had been in control for almost a year now. The people of New York were getting sick of the German soldiers waking around THEIR home territory. Now some of them decided to try to do something about it.
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Constructive criticism would be appreciated.
Thanks, trickey
(more to come if you like)
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WASHINGTON, AMERICA
Lincoln looked down at the piece of paper presented before him. How could he of let this happen?
He knew when he signed it, it would get him nothing except maybe a bit of time. He knew Bismak would stop at nothing. But what choice did he have? He looked over at Bismak, smiled a fake smile, and put his pen to the paper ending all hopes of an American resistance.
LONDON, ENGLAND
“Greetings friends.” Elizabeth smiled, “as you may or may not know, the Americans have surrendered to the Germans. They were our most powerful ally, now we must fight their men. No more nations can be allowed to fall at the hands of that warmonger Bismak”
“But he can’t be stopped, his offence is too quick and strong, their defence rock solid. We should surrender now to prevent casualties” proclaimed Cleopatra.
The debating went on for hours with no solution fixed. The world was in no better shape then it was when the meeting started.
WASHINGTON, AMERICA , TWO WEEKS LATER
“So this is it, isn’t it Jack?”
“Yeah Curt, this is it. This is the start of us winning our freedom back. This is where it all begins.” answered Jack
They knew they had no chance of rebelling against the German army. Although the Americans had officially surrendered only two weeks ago, Germany had been in control for almost a year now. The people of New York were getting sick of the German soldiers waking around THEIR home territory. Now some of them decided to try to do something about it.
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Constructive criticism would be appreciated.
Thanks, trickey
(more to come if you like)
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