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My other new story concept, feedback pleeze
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"I can't belive it can do that!!" exclaimed Elizabeth. She was marveling at her new toy, a metalic tube which could destroy stone walls, it was extremely powerful, and she knew where she wanted more of them, on her boats.
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*BOOOM* "HEEEL YEAH!!!!" Shaka was extremely impressed with his new weapon, the "Greater BOOOM Stick" would be just what he'd need to destroy that evil Elizabeth's Caravels of snobbery. "Put dees mofos on de boats an' go put the big hole in Lizbith's head."
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*TAKATAKATAKATAKA* Taka's talking gun, or talka gun, was better than the Japanese Emperor had thought. "These will be great for our war against the decadent Chinese empire, and I like how you got them to say your name." Taka didn't dare tell his liege that the tak was the shot, and the Ka was from the barrel rolling to the next one.
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*WOOOSH AIIIIEEEEEEEEE!* The Chinese were playing around on an old catapult.
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this is the other teaser, comments?
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"I can't belive it can do that!!" exclaimed Elizabeth. She was marveling at her new toy, a metalic tube which could destroy stone walls, it was extremely powerful, and she knew where she wanted more of them, on her boats.
________________________________________
*BOOOM* "HEEEL YEAH!!!!" Shaka was extremely impressed with his new weapon, the "Greater BOOOM Stick" would be just what he'd need to destroy that evil Elizabeth's Caravels of snobbery. "Put dees mofos on de boats an' go put the big hole in Lizbith's head."
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*TAKATAKATAKATAKA* Taka's talking gun, or talka gun, was better than the Japanese Emperor had thought. "These will be great for our war against the decadent Chinese empire, and I like how you got them to say your name." Taka didn't dare tell his liege that the tak was the shot, and the Ka was from the barrel rolling to the next one.
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*WOOOSH AIIIIEEEEEEEEE!* The Chinese were playing around on an old catapult.
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this is the other teaser, comments?
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