Lets Create A Story

[Captain]

Yeah, me too!

I'm having a LOT of fun both writing my parts and reading other people's!

I know I've got a lot invested in the story now but I don't want to be greedy. I don't want it to seem like I'm trying to take control of the story.

How about this? I promise not to post until at LEAST THREE other writers post sections?
Sound good?


So all you writers out there, new and old, take this story where you think it should go next! Grundel, would love to have some input from you!

Besides, I know how to write to fill in what's needed and leave a bunch of options for the next writer, but I can never decide what should actually happen next. So forcing myself out for a few posts will be good. Plus I gotta get back to work...

[Sovy Kurosei]

LOL... I guess I'll have to wait as well... C'mon people, post up

[Grundel]

Oh all right

"Report" Admiral Sanchez commanded, his eyes never waivering from the mainland.

"Sir, this land is rich in resources. However, most of the land has been claimed by other nations. " Commander Reynaldo replied.

Sanchez retracted his spy glass and tucked it in his pouch. His attention focused fully on his commander.

"Claimed by other nations? , tell me. What is the Spanish creed?"

"To bring the light of Queen Isabella to all, m'lord"

"So then, tell me. What concern do I have over other nations? Especially these?"

Reynaldo swallowed. Sanchez seemed to always find the contemptable in everything. However, he was right. Their ship steamed from Madrid a year ago, to map out other contents, to find new worlds. And this most definitley was a new world. The natives that inhabited the land were primitive, engaged in some petty internal squabble. They knew little about politics of these people, but they did know that these savages have not mastered the art of even the simple muzzle loading rifles, let alone the breach loading guns that the marines of the Spanish Army used. There would be little resistance. He had been wittness to this bloodshed before when the Aztecs where 'liberated'.

"But sir, perhaps their cheif...this Shaka...would be reasonable? Our scouts have made contact with some of the natives, and they feel that they would be in awe of our technology. We could trade with them on our terms. They could be a protectorate..."

"These are stinking savages! Why negotiate when you can take? They do not understand the way of our people. But they will. Set in a course for home waters. We must return and take the needed steps."

Reynaldo despised him. Something must be done. "Yes sir." The commander retreated to the helm of the HMS Maria. For now, the people of this land will live. But for how long?

[Captain]

whoah...that's unexpected.

Grundel, did you mean to reintroduce the Romans - the same Romans who got eliminated/assimilated by the Anklodians and Zulus sixteen years ago? (or is this something farther in the future?) Or is this altogether a different tribe that happens to have the same name?

either way, it's cool. just curious...

[Grundel]

Crap

That is one of the reasons that i did not want to get involved. I did not realize that they were already introduced.

I will edit my story.

Sorry for the lack of continuity

[Grundel]

Upon researching the historical transcripts, it appears the the historians misinterpreted ancient text. It was the ENglish, not the Romans. But as you can tell, the ancient word for conqueror is similar to both English and Roman.

[Sovy Kurosei]

Eh? Ain't the English already there? And already know of the Shaka reign and whatnot?

Awww... heck, lets just change it to Japanese, just to be safe

[Grundel]

I tried.

I could have swore that i had read the entire post. But dammit. I missed the freaking english. I have edited my post AGAIN!!!

I guess the surgery took alot out of me. I always try to keep continuity in all of my stories. I failed miserably here, and am afrain that any thunder, or entertainment value that my contribution could have provided has been shredded and discarded like an old newspaper.

Still, Ike had a great idea here, and hopefully we can get some more of these going. But then again, that kid always had some real original ideas.

I am glad to see that the forum has picked back from back in my day Keep these stories coming.

[Sovy Kurosei]

LOL, don't worry about, only a minor error.

Hopefully somebody else posts up soon, so we can keep this thread new the top, where it belongs!

[Captain]

Grundel, no worries! You did great! Hope the recovery from surgery is going well.

A touch of real-life historicity with the Spanish and the Aztecs there eh?

Sovy, go ahead and post. According to my earlier promise, I've still got to wait for one other poster before jumping back in but there's no reason you have to.

I've got a bit of a plotline forming for Naldo and a special somebody... a touch on an Anglo-Chinese war (TBA)... with a bit back on the Zulu civil war... and a tie in with the Spaniards in the near future. I'll leave what the Russians do totally up to you. Feel free to write for any of the other civs too! or even a new civ...

btw, don't feel too sorry for Shaka. the monster's quite the survivalist!

Happy writing everyone!

[ElDiablo]

Trotsky, being a man of action and not a man of decisions, knew that he would not be the best choice to rule over the newly-freed Russian empire. However, all was not lost. He knew about one young woman who was quite influential in the revolution. Even after many Russian citizens had fallen in the revolution of St. Petersburg and the revolters there were going to give up, she had managed to revive their spirits with a patriotic, courageous speech. She would be the perfect ruler for his mother country.
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5 months later

Catherine, the newly-crowned monarch of Russia, looked at her domestic advisor in disbelief and anger. Not long after the Russian people had kicked their Zulu oppressors out of their homeland, but another group of dissentors had formed in a few western cities.

Catherine remembered her history well. It was a few decades before the Zulus had arrived that the Russians had completed their conquest of the Indian empire. But, even though all efforts were made to placate the Indian people as an attempt to assimilate them into the Russian norm, it is impossible to please everyone.

Now, these Indians had not only emigrated from the Russian cities en masse, but they had started their Indian civilization once again to the west of the Russians in the unexplored regions.

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Meanwhile, to the west of the known world...

Rohan, the descendent of Gandhi, the ruler of the first Indian empire, and leader of the second empire, knew what he was doing. He knew that the Russians were unable to explore these lands as they were too weak from fighting his ancestors.

However, many years before, as the Russians were winning the first great war, Gandhi knew the time had come to prepare for the future and he had taken some mobile forces from the front lines to explore these lands and Rohan knew how rich in resources they were. In the rolling hills and the grassy plains, there were horses, iron, elephants, saltpeter, silk and spices in abundance. The great ocean that connected many of the known empires had a great bay that the Indians had put their capital, New Delhi, next to.

Rohan was now praising his ancestor's foresight and he knew that his newly-formed Indian army would be able to stop any invading force, Russian or otherwise, from taking over the Indian empire again.

His Indians were also given muskets by the English during the revolution against the Zulus and using the saltpeter they had, they made more to arm their ten musketmen divisions. Also, they harnessed the elephants with great plates of armour and after training these great beasts, they had 5 highly-mobile, mighty divisions of war elephants.

Not only that, but the Indians had fortified some of the eastern mountains of their empire and had placed catapults in them to fire upon any invaders as well as give warning to the rest of the empire.

All the scientific knowledge the Russians possessed was taken by the Indians so that they would never be looked upon again as primitive barbarians waiting to be conquered.

Rohan looked over all of these military progress reports with glee. How he would like to see Catherine's face now.

[ElDiablo]

There we go, Captain...
You can post again.

[godinex]

... and the history?

[Captain]

Indians in the West eh? Looks interesting...
It's good to see another contribution from you ElDiablo! What do you think of the story thus far - any real upsets?

Originally posted by ElDiablo
There we go, Captain...
You can post again.

almost! but I've got to wait for at least one other poster before I'm allowed to continue... here's hoping one will come soon!

[Captain]

Originally posted by godinex
... and the history?

I don't get it. What do you mean? Does something not make sense or is something missing?