Originally posted by Mad Bomber
No prob. I origionally wanted to post a small paragraph about it but it had a lot of valuable info that I didn't know so I posted nearly the entire excerpt.
As for your story, its not bad, but I think that your style could use some polishing. In particular, I think that you use quotes and statements too often and at times it becomes confusing without a reference as to exactly who is talking.
Taken for the whole its an entertaining story, keep up the good work.
No prob. I origionally wanted to post a small paragraph about it but it had a lot of valuable info that I didn't know so I posted nearly the entire excerpt.
As for your story, its not bad, but I think that your style could use some polishing. In particular, I think that you use quotes and statements too often and at times it becomes confusing without a reference as to exactly who is talking.
Taken for the whole its an entertaining story, keep up the good work.
snippets... a short catchup with the world from the face of war
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