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  • #1

    Haiku Nation

    this promises to be uber skrewed up

    Nation of Haiku
    Land so beautiful and clean
    The Army is Strong

    Soldiers are ready
    Staring into unknown fate
    Death is greatest fear

    Haiku has hero
    He fights with strength of thousands
    His name is Fu Ren

    Fu Ren has strong men
    He'll lead them into battle
    Enemy blood spills

    Evil ones invade!
    Soldiers fight for family
    Good names not tarnished

    Valiant Fighting
    swords clash and make loud battle
    Fu Ren kills thousands

    Arrows fly in air
    Fu Ren has pain in shoulder
    Fu Ren is arrowed!

    Enemy thinks Win
    Fu Ren does not stop fighting
    Haiku fights onward!

    Enemy has fled
    Fu Ren's men celebrating
    Fu Ren Falls to ground

    Death has taken Fu
    He is now fighting demons
    for Haiku Nation!!

    short sweet, and not good to eat IMHO!!
    First Master, Banan-Abbot of the Nana-stary, and Arch-Nan of the Order of the Sacred Banana.
    Marathon, the reason my friends and I have been playing the same hotseat game since 2006...
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  • #2
    I have to reply
    Haiku can be maddening
    I will say thumbs up



    My Civ Stories:
    Oil...and Sponges,Great Big Death Story of MRkorth, My Dinner With Xerxes, E.V.I.L., The Bijou - which I swear I will finish someday!, The Man Who Would Be King,, Will it Go ‘Round in Circles?, Man on the Street, Myron VS. the Volcano, Chairmen of the Border, The Turn of Time.

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    • #3
      Very good our first haiku and 6th poem


      although the last few stanzas are somewhat weak... they don't seem to flow or read quite correctly- but the beginning is perfect!

      I'm nominating this.
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      • #4
        w00p w00p
        First Master, Banan-Abbot of the Nana-stary, and Arch-Nan of the Order of the Sacred Banana.
        Marathon, the reason my friends and I have been playing the same hotseat game since 2006...

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        • #5
          Dude this is poems. Good ones, but is it a story?
          Don't tell a twisted person he is twisted, he may take offence. (THAT MEANS ME!)
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          Nesing, come and see what its about in the Stories and Diplomacy threads.

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          • #6
            poems are tales

            ever read the bvhata-gita or the Icelandic Sagas? or the Illiad
            -->Visit CGN!
            -->"Production! More Production! Production creates Wealth! Production creates more Jobs!"-Wendell Willkie -1944

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            • #7
              DC, my life is an icelandic saga
              First Master, Banan-Abbot of the Nana-stary, and Arch-Nan of the Order of the Sacred Banana.
              Marathon, the reason my friends and I have been playing the same hotseat game since 2006...

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              • #8
                I would say poetry fits in just fine with the civ stories here. Themes of war, battle, struggle, ancient cities and civilization, military posturing, and nationalism are abundant throughout history.


                "Sir Gawain and the Green Knight" by the Pearl poet

                Beowulf

                "My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
                Look on my works, ye Mighty, and despair!"
                Ozymandias - Percy Bysshe Shelley

                "The English shafts in volleys hailed,
                In headlong charge their horse assailed;"
                The Battle - Sir Walter Scott

                Any numbers of poems by Walt Whitman, such as: "By the Bivouac's Fitful Flame," "Cavalry Crossing a Ford," "An Army Corps on the March," "Vigil Strange I Kept on the Field One Night."

                John Milton's "When the Assault Was Intended to the City," where he writes of how Alexander the Great spared the house of the poet Pindar during the destruction of Thebes.

                "Rule, Britannia, rule the waves
                Britons never will be slaves."
                Rule, Britannia! - James Thomson

                "The Destruction of Sennacherib" by Lord Byron, a satanza from which I am going to filch for an upcoming story. (Cited, of course.)

                "Epitaphs of the War" by Kipling.
                "First Snow in Alsace" by Richard Wilbur


                And now…”Haiku Nation!”
                My Civ Stories:
                Oil...and Sponges,Great Big Death Story of MRkorth, My Dinner With Xerxes, E.V.I.L., The Bijou - which I swear I will finish someday!, The Man Who Would Be King,, Will it Go ‘Round in Circles?, Man on the Street, Myron VS. the Volcano, Chairmen of the Border, The Turn of Time.

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                • #9
                  Beautiful.
                  Read Blessed be the Peacemakers | Read Political Freedom | Read Pax Germania: A Story of Redemption | Read Unrelated Matters | Read Stains of Blood and Ash | Read Ripper: A Glimpse into the Life of Gen. Jack Sterling | Read Deutschland Erwachte! | Read The Best Friend | Read A Mothers Day Poem | Read Deliver us From Evil | Read The Promised Land

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                  • #10
                    Great poem, turtle man. I agree with DC a bit though, the beggining is much stronger than the ending. My favourite stanza is probably the fourth, with the second one close behind.

                    BTW, your right, it was quite good to eat

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                    • #11
                      You should head over to the Civfanatics All Haiku Thread.

                      Shameless plug I know
                      Please visit the thread anyway
                      And post your haikus

                      Last edited by PresidentMike; July 22, 2003, 01:14.
                      "Terminate, with extreme prejudice"

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                      • #12
                        It's cute but its not really Haiku...

                        Haiku poems should stand alone and include a kigo - a word describing the season that it is set.

                        The beaver in wood
                        Awaits the old ditch digger
                        Pelts to keep us warm

                        Perhaps we should call it Civku and be done with it.

                        Sam

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