War - My Dream II

[Kuciwalker]

The last few jagged burning lances of light strike the ground. Rain begins to fall, washing away the scars of war. Off in the distance, where the jungle blazed at Philadelphia, the fire dies down, and even the embers cease to glow.

Yet the storm clouds do not dissipate. I get this sense in my bones that perhaps they never will.
The clouds disperse, seemingly at random, going off to fuel people's own, private wars. With a flash of insight I see the pattern - they will join, greater than before, over Paris, and make it truly the City of Lights.

It saddens my heart to know that another city will burn, but I know that it is inevitable, and will bring glory to Apolytonia. The glory of fire. The glory of Death.

Wars grow ever larger. The Iron in our mens' swords brings the lightning down to earth, where it kills friend and foe alike.

I wake up, sweating, knowing the fate of our nation. I wonder - is this a blessing, or a curse?

[Kuciwalker]

Comments, anyone?

[Aro]

It’s a beautiful text, Mr. Skywalker. Very creative. This is the real meaning of this game, we all are roleplaying… the life.
BTW, this is great:

Originally posted by skywalker
...over Paris, and make it truly the City of Lights.

[Thud]

It's significantly nicer than saying "Let's grab iron, build swordsmen, and pillage Paris!"
Gets the point across better too.

[Robber Baron]

Re: War - My Dream II

Originally posted by skywalker
[i]The Iron in our mens' swords brings the lightning down to earth...

Did we get iron, and swords already?
Seriously, tho -- nice line, and an evocative piece.

[Kramerman]

good piece. I agree it gets the point across nicely

[GodKing]

I like. Keep doing this.

[Donal Graeme]

Perhaps someone has literary talent here. You should talk to Unortho about doing some pieces for the Jungle Gazette.

[Kuciwalker]

I've tried writing things for it, but except for freestyle poetry (i.e. this), I have no talent for writing. I've spent hours trying to write something halfway decent for the Gazette, but I can't get it good enough to submit.

[Aro]

Submit this to the Gazette, Mr. Skywalker. And another dreams you may have. It's good enough. As everybody can see in my posts, I can't write (in english; I can do this in Portuguese... what is really useless here ) but I can read, and I really like it. It's good for the game.

Edit: Take a look at Robert Heinlein's quotation in my signature.