Interesting start. the only thing i didint like at first read,is the tech calling miriam 'your worshipfullness',something you bovoiusly stole from starwars,but makes miriam sound like she is to be worshiped. just imho
i chuckled at the all-to-typical ending which somehow is still good.
reminds me of a bad @ssed slade,but intellectually i know its likely chairman yang,knowing franky